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Yes — I can definitely help with that. If you upload your CV as a **PDF**, I’ll be able to: 1. **Parse the content** into text. 2. **Review the structure, clarity, and formatting** (sections, ordering, readability). 3. **Analyze content quality** (skills, experience descriptions, achievements). 4. **Give recommendations** on what to: - Emphasize (e.g., quantifiable achievements, leadership, technical impact). - Add (missing sections or keywords relevant to your field). - Edit or rephrase (for conciseness or stronger impact). - Remove (outdated, redundant, or less relevant items). I’ll also suggest improvements tailored for **ATS (Applicant Tracking Systems)** and for human readability, depending on whether you want to emphasize technical detail, leadership, or career progression. 👉 Please go ahead and upload your CV PDF, and I’ll start the review.

I’ve gone through your CV carefully, and here’s a structured review with recommendations for improvement. --- ## Overall Impression Your CV presents you as a strong candidate with a rare combination of **military leadership**, **technical skills**, and **business development experience**. It highlights adaptability, analytical thinking, and international exposure. However, the presentation can be improved to emphasize **achievements over responsibilities**, reduce redundancy, and ensure **clarity for recruiters and Applicant Tracking Systems (ATS)**. --- ## Strengths - **Diverse Experience**: Military leadership, aerospace product management, and strategic business development. - **International Exposure**: Collaboration with ambassadors, CEOs, and foreign government representatives. - **Technical Skills**: Programming (Python, JavaScript, CSS, HTML), Data Science tools, SAP, Power BI. - **Strong Education**: Bachelor’s degree with honors, dean’s list, high GPA. - **Volunteering**: Adds a human dimension and demonstrates social responsibility. --- ## Areas for Improvement & Recommendations ### 1. Structure & Formatting - **Header**: Your contact info is clear, but LinkedIn is listed as `@eitanrobin` — better to show full URL (e.g., `linkedin.com/in/eitanrobin`) for easier recruiter access. - **Objective Statement**: “Seeking a Business Development Operations Position” is clear, but could be made **value-driven**, e.g.: > “Business Development & Operations professional with proven experience in aerospace, defense, and international strategy. Skilled in driving growth, managing cross-functional teams, and building partnerships across industries.” - **Consistency**: Dates should align in one format (e.g., `2024 – Present` vs `2016 - 2019`). Use en dashes consistently. --- ### 2. Work Experience Currently, the descriptions lean toward **responsibilities**. Recruiters prefer **achievements with measurable outcomes**. - **Operations Manager (AS – HOLDINGS)** - Instead of “Built and maintained relationships with CEOs…”, show **impact**: > “Secured X international partnerships in defense and energy sectors, strengthening company presence in 3 new markets.” - “Prepared business plans…” → Highlight results: > “Authored business plans that helped secure $X funding / won Y contracts.” - **Product Manager (IAI – Israel Aerospace Industries)** - Currently reads like a task list. Instead: > “Led development of aircraft components, delivering project milestones ahead of schedule and reducing production delays by X%.” - Quantify wherever possible (team size, budget handled, % efficiency gained). --- ### 3. Military Experience This section is impressive and differentiates you. However, it should be **condensed and achievement-focused**. - “Responsible for commanding and mentoring soldiers…” → > “Led sniper team of X soldiers in high-pressure operations, ensuring 100% mission readiness and operational success under life-threatening conditions.” - Move skills like “Leadership” and “Work under stress” into the **Skills** section (to avoid repetition). --- ### 4. Skills - Right now it’s a **mixed list** of soft skills, technical tools, and business competencies. Break it into **categories**: **Business & Strategy**: Strategic planning, Business development, Stakeholder management **Technical Tools**: Python, Power BI, SAP, RStudio, Excel, PowerPoint **Programming & Web**: HTML, CSS, JavaScript - Consider trimming — recruiters may not care about CSS/HTML unless you are applying to technical roles. --- ### 5. Education This is strong — honors, dean’s list, GPA. Consider adding **relevant coursework/projects** if they align with data/business roles. --- ### 6. Volunteering Good variety! To make it more impactful: - Instead of just “Lone elderly population during covid” → > “Organized weekly support for 20+ elderly individuals during COVID, ensuring essential care and social contact.” --- ### 7. Language & Style - Replace passive wording (“Was responsible for…”) with **action verbs** (“Led,” “Directed,” “Achieved,” “Delivered”). - Keep sentences concise — avoid long multi-clause lines. - Ensure alignment with the role you’re targeting (Business Development / Operations). --- ## Suggested Additions 1. **Achievements Section** (optional, before Education): Highlight 3–4 major quantified accomplishments (e.g., revenue growth, contracts secured, team leadership outcomes). 2. **Languages**: You note “Native Hebrew, proficient English” — list as a separate **Languages** section for clarity. 3. **Certifications**: Data Science courses are listed under Skills. Better to move them to a **Certifications** or **Professional Development** section. --- ## Example Revised Section (Product Manager) **Product Manager – Israel Aerospace Industries (2022 – 2024)** - Directed development of civil and defense aircraft components in collaboration with Dassault, ensuring compliance with international standards. - Streamlined production lifecycle management, improving delivery timelines by **15%**. - Coordinated cross-functional teams of engineers and project managers, achieving **on-time delivery for 2 major aircraft programs**. - Presented technical and business progress reports to executive leadership, driving decision-making at the VP level. --- ✅ With these changes, your CV will shift from “listing experience” to **showcasing impact and results**, which is what hiring managers and recruiters want. --- Would you like me to **rewrite your CV into a polished, recruiter-friendly version** (keeping ATS in mind) so you can compare side by side?

Perfect — let’s switch into **critical mode**. I’ll go line by line, showing **what your CV says now** vs. **how it should be rewritten** (with reasoning). I’ll be blunt: some parts weaken your CV and should be removed, rephrased, or condensed. --- # 🔴 Critical Review & Rewrite Suggestions ## 1. Header & Title **Current:** ``` Eitan Robin Seeking an Business Development Operations Position ``` **Issues:** - “an Business” → grammatical error (hurts credibility). - “Seeking…” is outdated phrasing. Employers want to see **what you are**, not what you’re looking for. **Fix:** ``` Eitan Robin Business Development & Operations Manager | Strategy | Aerospace | Defense ``` --- ## 2. Summary Paragraph **Current:** > “Motivated and adaptable professional with strong analytical thinking, fast learning ability, and a hands-on approach. Skilled at working across teams, solving problems, resolving blockers, and leveraging interpersonal strengths to align stakeholders and move initiatives forward.” **Issues:** - Generic buzzwords (motivated, adaptable, fast learning) → sounds like filler. - Zero achievements, no quantifiable impact. **Fix:** > “Business development and operations professional with experience leading cross-industry initiatives in aerospace, defense, and security. Proven track record of securing international partnerships, delivering multimillion-dollar projects, and managing cross-functional teams under high-pressure environments.” --- ## 3. Work Experience ### **Operations Manager – AS Holdings (2024 – Present)** **Current bullet:** - “Built and maintained relationships with CEOs and senior officials to advance strategic initiatives.” **Issue:** - Reads like a job description. No proof of value created. **Fix:** - “Built C-level relationships that resulted in **3 new cross-border partnerships in defense and clean energy sectors, valued at $X million**.” --- **Current bullet:** - “Prepared business plans and presentations to showcase key projects and partnerships.” **Issue:** - Sounds administrative; doesn’t show why it matters. **Fix:** - “Developed investor-ready business plans and board-level presentations that **secured approval for $X in new capital projects**.” --- ### **Product Manager – IAI (2022 – 2024)** **Current bullet:** - “Oversaw the development of two aircraft projects: civil private aircraft components and Dassault wing components in collaboration with Dassault.” **Issues:** - “Oversaw” = passive. - No scale (budget? size?). **Fix:** - “Led development of civil and defense aircraft components in partnership with Dassault, managing a team of 20 engineers and delivering projects on schedule with **15% faster production cycles**.” --- **Current bullet:** - “Managed production lifecycles, analyzed data to track progress, identified issues, and developed solutions.” **Issues:** - Reads like a responsibility list, not an accomplishment. **Fix:** - “Optimized production lifecycle monitoring with data-driven dashboards, cutting bottleneck resolution time by **30%**.” --- ### **Military Experience – Commando Brigade Egoz Unit (2016 – 2019)** **Current wording:** - “Was responsible for high stress situation decisions in the field.” **Issues:** - Weak wording (“Was responsible…”). - Doesn’t highlight outcomes. **Fix:** - “Led sniper team in life-critical operations, making split-second decisions under extreme pressure to ensure mission success and team safety.” --- ## 4. Skills Section **Current:** ``` • Leadership • Management • Work under stress in life threatening situations • Problem-solving • Strategic planning • Business development • Excel • Power Point • RStudio • Power BI • SAP • Python • CSS • JavaScript • HTML ``` **Issues:** - Mixed soft and technical skills, no structure. - Outdated tools (PowerPoint, Excel) don’t belong in a senior CV unless advanced. - Web dev skills (CSS/HTML/JS) are irrelevant if you’re applying to Business/Operations roles — they dilute focus. **Fix (structured):** **Business & Strategy:** Leadership, Business Development, Strategic Planning, Stakeholder Management **Data & Analytics:** Python, RStudio, Power BI, SAP, Excel (advanced) **Languages:** Hebrew (native), English (fluent) ➡ Remove CSS, JavaScript, HTML, PowerPoint — they make you look like you’re not sure of your positioning. --- ## 5. Education **Current:** ``` Bachelor in Industrial Engineering and Management Azrieli College of Engineering Jerusalem Graduated with honors among top graduates Dean's list GPA: 91.01/100 ``` **Issues:** - “among top graduates” and “Dean’s list” repeat the same point. - GPA is excellent, but write it cleanly. **Fix:** ``` B.Sc. Industrial Engineering & Management – Azrieli College of Engineering, Jerusalem Graduated with Honors | Dean’s List | GPA: 91/100 ``` --- ## 6. Volunteering **Current:** - “Lone elderly population during covid” **Issues:** - Incomplete phrasing, unclear impact. **Fix:** - “Organized weekly support for 20+ isolated elderly individuals during COVID, ensuring access to essentials and social engagement.” --- # 🚨 Summary of Critical Issues 1. **Generic language** (“motivated, fast learner”) → delete. 2. **Responsibilities > Achievements** → rewrite bullets to show measurable impact (%, $, scale, team size). 3. **Skills cluttered** → split into clear categories, remove irrelevant items (HTML/CSS). 4. **Objective outdated & grammatically wrong** → reframe as branding headline. 5. **Military experience phrasing weak** → rewrite to show leadership outcomes, not “responsible for.” 6. **Education repetitive** → condense. 7. **Volunteering vague** → clarify with outcomes. --- 👉 Bottom line: Your CV currently looks like a **job description list**. It must look like a **list of achievements**. Every bullet should answer: - What did you achieve? - How big was the impact? (numbers, $, %, scope) --- Would you like me to **completely rewrite one full page version** of your CV with these changes applied, so you can see exactly how it would read after transformation?

Excellent — this is exactly the mindset shift you need. A CV isn’t just a marketing flyer — it’s a **promise of evidence**. Everything you claim should be something you can **back up in an interview with a story, data, or example**. Let’s break this down into **principles** and **practical prep work** for each type of statement. --- # 🔑 General CV Advisement ## 1. No vague fluff — only verifiable claims ❌ Avoid: - “Motivated professional” - “Fast learner” - “Team player” ✅ Replace with: - “Delivered X aircraft project 15% ahead of schedule through optimized production workflows.” - “Collaborated with ambassadors and CEOs, securing 3 cross-border defense agreements.” 👉 **Rule**: If you can’t explain *how you know* you were motivated/fast/strategic, delete it. --- ## 2. Every line should answer: - **What did I do?** (Action) - **How did I do it?** (Method/tool/skill) - **What was the impact?** (Result/value/metric) 👉 This structure is sometimes called **STAR** (Situation, Task, Action, Result) or **CAR** (Challenge, Action, Result). Example: - **Before (vague):** “Managed production lifecycles.” - **After (provable):** “Managed production lifecycles for two aircraft programs, resolving bottlenecks that cut delivery delays by 30%.” In an interview, you can then tell the story: *“We had repeated delays due to X, I built a dashboard in Python and Power BI to track progress, which let us detect blockers earlier and reduce delay rates.”* --- ## 3. Achievements > Responsibilities Recruiters already assume you did the basic responsibilities of your job. ❌ Avoid: “Responsible for leading a team.” ✅ Use: “Led a 12-soldier sniper team during operations, achieving 100% mission readiness in hostile conditions.” --- ## 4. Be precise & quantify where possible - **Numbers**: % improvement, revenue, budget size, # of people managed. - **Scale**: “International partnerships across 4 countries.” - **Impact**: “Secured $2M in funding” vs. “Prepared business plans.” 👉 If you don’t have exact numbers, use **approximation** or **qualitative scale** (“double-digit efficiency gain,” “multi-million-dollar contracts,” “cross-border teams in 3 continents”). --- ## 5. Don’t include irrelevant skills Listing **CSS/HTML/JavaScript** makes it seem like you’re unfocused. If you want Business/Operations roles, cut them. Instead, highlight skills that matter: stakeholder management, international negotiations, financial planning, analytics. --- ## 6. Prepare “proof stories” for every strong claim If you write it, **you must be ready to explain it**. Examples: - **“Proven track record of securing international partnerships”** 👉 Be ready with: *“In 2024, I negotiated with X ambassador and Y defense company, which resulted in Z agreement valued at $X.”* - **“Optimized production lifecycle monitoring, reducing delays by 30%”** 👉 Be ready with: *“We used to have weekly delays. I built a dashboard in Power BI, and within 3 months, we cut average delay time from 10 days to 7.”* - **“Led sniper team under high-pressure operations”** 👉 Be ready with: *“I commanded 12 soldiers, and during [operation], I had to make a real-time call that avoided casualties. That leadership under stress translates into calm decision-making in business crises.”* --- # 📝 Preparing for Writing (and Interview) When writing your CV, think in **interview preparation terms**: - Every **bullet point = a story you must be able to tell**. - If you can’t tell the story, cut it. - If the story is boring (“I made PowerPoint slides”), either remove it or reframe it to emphasize impact (“I created board-level presentations that influenced approval for $X project”). --- # ✅ Final Advice - **Cut vague descriptions** → Replace with specific, measurable outcomes. - **Keep every bullet achievement-focused** → What did you deliver that others couldn’t? - **Proof-test your CV** → For each line, ask: - Could I tell a 1–2 min story about this in an interview? - Would the story clearly show value, action, and result? - Does this line differentiate me from any other candidate with the same job title? --- 👉 Bottom line: Your CV must read like a **track record of wins**, not a **list of duties**. And in interview, you back every win with a clear, concrete example. --- Do you want me to take one of your **roles (e.g., Operations Manager at AS Holdings)** and fully rewrite it into a **story-backed, achievement-style CV entry** with examples of the interview “story” you’d need to prepare? That way you’ll see exactly how to build this “bullet → story” pipeline.